Do you think this is a good start for a story?

I honestly liked it! It sounds intresting, i think you have a great start for your story :) Just be careful not to post too much of it someone might steal your work. You can put an internet signature on it some how but i cannot remember. secure your work ! lol. Because i think if you were to make a novel out of this, you could get it published. If you did I'd buy it :) sounds amazing